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    Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

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    Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Alxkend001isBack on Fri Sep 07, 2012 12:18 am

    Author's Note: This story is also done on World Beyblade Organization and Bulbagarden Forums.

    Prologue

    Long ago, in the ancient city of Tollan, a Beyblade containing the power and essence of the feathered serpent, Quetzalcoatl, was created by the high priests of the city. This Beyblade, also named after Quetzalcoatl, has proven to be more powerful than any other Beyblade made before it. Fearing the use of the sacred Bey for malevolent purposes, the priests had it locked away in an underground temple, protected by guardians of obsidian. Soon after, a prophecy has surfaced, stating that in 1000 years, a group of strangers shall come forth to the city from beyond, and a "Chosen One" among those strangers would find Quetzalcoatl, and claim mastery over its sacred power. Most people in the city didn't think that this prophecy might come true, considering that the obsidian warriors created to keep guard over the Bey would not be thwarted so easily. But, the priests knew all too well that prophecies are not to be taken lightly. Even after people abandoned the city, the Quetzalcoatl Beyblade, guarded by the obsidian warriors, lies within the inner sanctum of the underground temple, waiting for its "Chosen One" to claim it...


    Act 1: Enter Alexander Arkwright

    It was the summer of 1900 in the United States of America, and our hero, a young, blue-eyed brunette of twelve years named Alexander Arkwright (Alex for short), had just gotten out of school, along with his friends. He has a taste for the wonders of the ancient world, in spite of being easily bored. His father, Henry Arkwright, is an archaeologist, and because of him, he is interested in the ancient world. He got home, as his mother asks him, "How was school, Alex?", to which he replied, "Boring as usual, mum, but thankfully, it's the last day of school for the summer! I'm going to miss reading all these books about the ancient civilizations there at the school library, though."

    She nodded in understanding, as she then says, "You know, your father is going to lead an expedition in South America to find the lost city of Tollan," as she then continued, "And guess what? He is inviting you to come along for the ride!" At that statement, Alex lets out a delighted cheer, happy that he would be joining his father on an archaeological expedition for once. Usually, when his father would come back from an expedition, he brings home a souvenir for him. Just as Alex stopped jumping for joy to catch his breath, his father walked in with a smile on his face. "Hello, honey", started Mrs. Arkwright, "Did they approve of the expedition?", at which he gave a nod for "yes", as he then added, "Though they're not too sure about having Alex come along, but rest assured, he will come along, won't you, son?", to which he replies eagerly, "Yes! I'm going with you! I can't wait to see what we'll find at Tollan!", as his mother retorts, "I'm sure you will, son."

    The next day, it was time for Alex and Henry to meet with the other members of the expedition for the trip to come. They meet the archaeologists at the train station, as they went aboard the train to South America. After many long hours of travelling, they arrive in South America, ready to start the search for the city of Tollan. Thankfully, there was an old map that leads to Tollan, found in an earlier expedition that was also lead by Henry. They trudged their way through the jungle, making absolutely certain that they read the map. As they traveled through the jungle, Henry decided to tell his son about Quetzalcoatl. Alex listened on in interest, as his father wove a tale about a feathered serpent god, a metal spinning top created to hold its power, and an underground temple where it is locked up and guarded by warriors of obsidian. He remarks, "You know, a story like this would make a good novel, don't you think?", as his father nodded in agreement. After two days of trudging through the jungle, the team eventually stumbled upon the ruins of a city never seen before; They found the lost city of Tollan. "Wow...", said an awestruck Alex, "So this city isn't just a legend. It's real..."

    Act 1 End

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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by megaman_007 on Fri Sep 07, 2012 7:56 pm

    One of Mixed Feel Introductions I Have read
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Alxkend001isBack on Sat Sep 08, 2012 5:33 am

    Thank you, I guess. Anyone else got something to say about my story?
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Bronzebrawler on Mon Sep 10, 2012 2:04 am

    it's looooooooooooong
    but good
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Alxkend001isBack on Mon Sep 10, 2012 10:09 am

    Would you like me to put up the next chapter?
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by megaman_007 on Mon Sep 10, 2012 10:01 pm

    Ya Keep Putting up the chapters
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Alxkend001isBack on Tue Sep 11, 2012 2:42 am

    Act 2: The Underground Temple

    "Now that we're here", started Henry, "Let's see what we can find at this city", as he, Alex, and the other archaeologists went to work, deciphering the symbols on the ruined structures, finding fabulous treasures, and locating the entrance to the underground temple. They've deciphered the symbols, found plenty of treasure (as well as a few metal tops), but no entrance to the underground temple. Just when they were going to give up on finding the temple, Alex had gotten an idea, "What if the entrance to the temple was disguised as a well?", at which his father replied, "Now there's an idea, son! I recall seeing a well near the temple of the high priests. Perhaps we could find the secret entrance there!" Kenneth Phelps, a fellow archaeologist remarks, "Well, what are we waiting for, fellows? Let's investigate that well!", as they went to where the temple of the high priests are, and found the well. Alex yells into it, "Hello?! Anyone down there?!", as it echoed back. Little did he know, is that the call awakened something, deep within the bowels of the underground temple. Five obsidian statues that resemble Aztec Jaguar warriors were all standing in a row, when suddenly, they came to life, knowing that someone had come to have found the entrance to the temple. The archaeologists lowered a rope into the dark entrance below. Each lit up a lantern, so that they would see their way through the darkened corridors of the temple. One by one, the archaeologists, including Alex, climbed down the rope into the resting place of Quetzalcoatl.

    The group slowly walked their way through the hallways, taking in the sights of the carvings on the wall, depicting the history of Quetzalcoatl. Darrel S. DeLynch, another one of Henry's fellow archaeologists, asks fearfully, "What if the obsidian guardians find us? They might cut our hearts out to sacrifice us!", at which a deep, strong, intimidating voice replies out of nowhere, and in perfect English, "Actually, pale-faced mortal, that job only applies to the high priests of the city!" At the sound of the voice, Henry demands, "Who said that?!", to which another foreign voice says back ominously, "Right behind you all...", as the group turned around slowly...to see the five living obsidian statues standing in front of them, in fighting poses with weapons at the ready. "The obsidian warriors...", Alex gasped in awe, as his father calmly explained, "Great obsidian warriors, we mean no harm. We have come to study the temple, and to discover the secrets that lie within," to which another one of the warriors replied gruffly, "Liars! You have come steal Quetzalcoatl from its resting place!", pulling out a sharp, obsidian-tipped spear.

    Just as the warriors seemed ready to attack, an authoritative female voice calls out, "Warriors, stand down!", as its owner stepped forward from the shadows; a tall, tan-skinned woman with voluptuous curves, especially on her well-endowed chest. She is also dressed in the kind of clothing worn by the high priests. Her hair is a deep black, and reaches down to her posterior region. "Lady Tlaneci!", gasped the warriors, as they knelt down respectfully. The priestess, known as Tlaneci, asks the archaeologists, "May I ask you strangers on how you have managed to find your way to this city?", to which Henry replied, "We have found our way to this place, by the way of an ancient map found in an earlier expedition that I have lead.", as he showed her the map to Tollan. "I am not that surprised, to tell you the truth, at how you've followed the map. What I am surprised at, however, is how you've managed to find it, for my fellow priests had hidden that map well enough to prevent those vile Conquistadors from finding it," she remarked, looking over the map.

    Alex blushed, seeing how beautiful Tlaneci is, hid behind his father shyly. She saw this, and asks Henry with a gentle smile, "Oh, and who is this child?", as he replied, "That would be my son, Alexander. Alex for short.", before whispering to him, "Say hello, Alex," as he slowly drew out from behind Henry, waving "hello" to the priestess nervously. She knelt down to his eye level, giving him a reassuring smile, as he remarks, "You know, Tlaneci, you're quite beautiful," at which she replies with a giggle, "Why, thank you kindly, young Alexander," before standing back up. She turned towards the obsidian warriors, and calmly ordered to them, "Lead us to the chamber, warriors," as they replied in unison, "Yes, Lady Tlaneci." They then got up, and proceeded to guide the group through the inscribed halls of the temple, before finally coming upon the inner sanctum, a chamber where the Beyblade of Quetzalcoatl rests, embedded in a wall at the end of the chamber. "We have arrived at the resting place of Quetzalcoatl," announced Tlaneci, before ushering Alex to step forward towards the wall, having a hunch that he might be the "Chosen One"...

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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by megaman_007 on Tue Sep 11, 2012 6:59 pm

    Well the suspense is getting quite revealing I'd say.
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    Re: Metal Fight Beyblade: The Legend of Quetzalcoatl

    Post by Bronzebrawler on Thu Sep 13, 2012 12:36 am

    umm.. it's not perfect but it's like needing some more presentation

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